Baker describes the escalators themselves that rise to his office, “They were the free-standing kind: a pair of integral sins swooping upward between the two floors they served without struts or piers to bear any intermediate weight.”
-This blogger used a long quotation. This could have been broken apart and simplified as two sentences or more.
http://thelostmessageofwords.blogspot.com/
"H e also uses figurative language when he mentions the escalator"
- This blogger said the verb "uses" and if makes his observations sound weak.
http://mbutchko.blogspot.com/
It also seems manipulating and compulsive like there is a hidden problem within the character that is expressed through sharp abrasive language.
- This blogger began to use past tense. At the beginning he/she used present tense. This sentence would sound better if he/she said expresses instead of expressed
http://wowfaktor.blogspot.com/
J. D. Salinger is an author who uses very low and denotative words to write his stories.
- THIS blogger, says the verb "use" when describing the diction. I think if the writer would say "conveys a low and denotative type of diction" instead of uses.
http://vikingdeathmetal.blogspot.com/
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